Suggestions by ngh3bfkf
In your opening paragraph, I don’t quite understand what you mean by “continued back.” Also, it would probably be good if you could give a clearer thesis right off the bat of what you are arguing for and against. It would also help to explain exactly what Title IX is in the first paragraph, before you start talking about it. Besides that, just make sure you add a lot of content and cited facts from your sources. There are also some spelling and grammar errors you should watch for. Running a spell check with MS Word should find most of them though.
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