Evaluation by KateSpade85
You have some very strong points and great statistics about the effects of Title IX on women and their performance in athletics and academics. However, your comparison mentions women and men. I would like to see you show some statistics of male performance in these two areas and then compare the two. I believe that your argument would be a lot stronger if you display stats from both sides. Then, you can prove that Title IX affects women more than men. It just seems as if you are jumping to a conclusion without showing any evidence behind it.
Also, you use great statistics to enhance your argument. Just be careful that you aren't using strictly stats without putting much persuasion into it. Good luck!