Evaluation of draft by abc123
You present pros and cons of each system of voting so much that it is impossible to tell where you are going with the paper. I think a clear statement of your claim is necessary at the beginning. Also, when presenting pros and cons, I think it is important to remember the two sides of the argument (National system or not). It seams that sometimes you venture into the discussion of paper or electronic voting, which is not the issue. Also, I recommend looking through your paper and where ever you see that a sentence can be broken up into two sentences, do that. Many of the sentences are long and complex requiring the reader to reread the beginning of the sentence in order to understand the end. Overall, I think the paper needs to be clearer.
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- spidey32586 last edited on 11 June 2005 at 10:09 am by aforte