Comments by Ingue86 for JoeCool
A well defined argument, but the opinions of running presidents seems a little irrelevent. Their opinions before the elections and after differ greatly, yielding no assurance that anything was going to happen. Also, there are many examples in the draft, but no hard facts or quotations. The quotations and references to reputable sources will greatly improve the validity of your argument. Lastly I would try to include a more specific example of a possible alternative source of energy. The idea that our economy will itself solve the energy problem is great, but any supporting examples will clarify, and improve your point. Otherwise a great start.
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