Evaluation by FB5945
In both sections of your rough draft, you provide excellent facts to argue your point. However, your point is never stated throughout the draft. I know this isn't complete, but you need to make sure you have a clear point you are attempting to argue. Also you close by acknowledging that some people argue that Title IX has hurt men athletics. For me personnally, I'd be more willing to listen to you argument if you include at least some of the harmful affects it has had against men, nothing to defeat the purpose of your paper, but simply to point out both sides of the argument. other than that I thought you had excellent information.