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Evaluation of ShinyKobold's Draft by Hybrido

Overall, this is a well written position paper; its organization and sources do a good job of presenting the issue and its solution. There were a few grammatical errors and some of the sentences could be worded better, but further editting can take care of these. The paper is not without its faults. Not enough attention is given to the benefits and details of alternative fuels. Simply listing the negatives of petroleum may convince the casual reader until the cost of installing infrastructure for alternative fuel sources is mentioned. It would also help if there were some direct source citing in that section of the paper as well. For instance, concentrate on solar power and give some technical sources that show economic feasibility with short-term and long-term benefits. Basically, the last part of the paper needs fleshing out; the introduction and oil disadvantages sections were fine. Hybrido

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