btnharmony evaluation of dcorcoran's draft
There is a nice range of issues discussed within this paper. You address the issues of HOPE scholarship and its limitations for need-based students and the cost of college room and board. I enjoyed how you not only introduced the problem, but also you did a good job of provididing a solution to the problem. I like how you introduced your quotes and were able to use them to support your ideas. Only thing I would do, if anything, would be to provide an real world example of where one student, who was "poor" was unable to attend a college that had better grades than another student who had the money, but not as good grades as the "poor" student, so then the reader will be able to see actual occurences.
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- dcorcoran last edited on 11 June 2005 at 10:19 am by aforte