Evaluation by rumanaha
Your first improvement needs to be size. The paper at first glance seems too short and after reading it I definitely found that you are just discussing one point. You only talk about how merit-based scholarship breeds competition and leads to better quality students attending high class universities. You need more effective reasons to show why merit based financial aid is better than need based financial aid. I already had a lot of rebuttals for your argument. You also need to show how your basic argument might have flaws in it, this will make it more credible and harder to refute. Overall whatever material you have seems good and I think if you can just include more points the same way you did this one, then you will have a great paper.
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