Pimptastic's comments on Brick's draft
I think this paper is very well written. Clear thoughts and arguments, but the only thing this paper lacks is meat. IF you foudn some statistics or maybe some quotations this paper would be golden. It is clear you have a formulated opinion and have thought a lot about this topic, but seeing other people's words or some hard facts will sway more people to agreeing with you. In my opinion once you do some more research you will be done with this paper.
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