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Evaluation of rumanaha's policy paper by hmoob_ladie

I see that you have some major points that you're trying to make but it could be stronger if you included additional research to back up your points. Numbers/ data would help in the research aspect. I do not neccessarily agree with you and can find many rebuttals, so try and make your arguments as soundproof as you can. I also noticed some repetiveness in your second and third paragraph. It seems that you do not have a conclusion, and if you think that you do then it's not very strong; work on the conclusion where it'll sum up what you're arguing and make one good strong final though. Also, take notice that you're writing in a very casual tone... I'm not sure if that really matters or not. Otherwise, nice job.

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