Evaluations by Pratt, Adam
Good strong first paragraph. Good job tying in equality with title IX, and giving a brief description of what title nine is. Give more statistics, and stronger information to back up your point in paragraph 2. Good job supporting your point with facts in paragraph three. Make sure that you cite where you got this information from so that the reader knows you did not just pull this information from your head but that you actually conducted research. Your paper would appear a lot stronger if you had statistics to back up your points. I think you should do a better job of describing what title IX is to the reader, and make sure they have a better understanding of the benefits and impact that title IX has had on the lives of millions of women. Obviously you are not done, but that was a pretty decent first draft.
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