Comments by ShinyKobold
You have a good argument, but you should add more support for some of your ideas. For example, more facts that clearly establish and demonstrate our dependence on foreign oil. It may not seem like something that is needed to be said, but I think it would make your argument stronger and more effective. My other big suggestion is to make a clearer statement of what your plan for funding is. Saying that changing our main source of energy to hydrogen or methane is just, "a step that everyone would just take and get it over with" is too vague and should definitely be cleared up in the final version. Other than that I think it good, just back up your statements with more facts and clarify.
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- FlemDogg last edited on 11 June 2005 at 10:11 am by aforte